The tension!. And the strange atmosphere that is not outright fear, but a cold shrinking of the 'visitor'. You make good use of the fear or tension that is engendered by darkness, and filth, whereas it might simply be outright repugnance in daylight. And I wonder who these others are, who you are waiting for? Good short story attributes. I am a fan of the short story, and keep meaning to find enough time to develop it myself.
The tension!. And the strange atmosphere that is not outright fear, but a cold shrinking of the 'visitor'. You make good use of the fear or tension that is engendered by darkness, and filth, whereas it might simply be outright repugnance in daylight. And I wonder who these others are, who you are waiting for? Good short story attributes. I am a fan of the short story, and keep meaning to find enough time to develop it myself.
Thanks for the kind words, Jenni.