I agree re starting from part 2. If there is any criticism, then I'd say the text is a bit too wordy and 'explanatory' when describing the interaction between Mr Rose and Hergé, and I wonder if more direct dialogue and less inner musing/explanation to the reader might move the action along better? Do continue with the story, it has me eager to see what the 'alarm bells' turn out to foretell.
Thanks Greta. I think starting later is universally supported! I know I can be a bit 'wordy' at the beginnings of things - but this is an early draft. The jury's out about finishing it, but the first six sections are now posted on the site. If you read on, you may get closer to those ringing bells..!
Hi Ian,
I agree re starting from part 2. If there is any criticism, then I'd say the text is a bit too wordy and 'explanatory' when describing the interaction between Mr Rose and Hergé, and I wonder if more direct dialogue and less inner musing/explanation to the reader might move the action along better? Do continue with the story, it has me eager to see what the 'alarm bells' turn out to foretell.
Greta
Thanks Greta. I think starting later is universally supported! I know I can be a bit 'wordy' at the beginnings of things - but this is an early draft. The jury's out about finishing it, but the first six sections are now posted on the site. If you read on, you may get closer to those ringing bells..!