Grimsby - 4
idle chatter
Here’s another draft poem from my in-progress collection about Grimsby Docks; the image followed by a recording of the associated draft.
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Two things: you might think about removing the second 'I remember' and just having 'when this window frame wasn't broken..' Also you use 'as if' twice. The second time you might leave it out and hear what it sounds like without those two words, or have a variant such as 'as though'.
Jim