A poem, in draft.
hah! wonderful twist! I love the spare language and rhythm - good example of less is more!
Thanks Zanna. It's really an experiment in form. I had an earlier version with even more repetition, but that seemed just a little too much.
I like this; nice, simple, but structured with vivid imagery.
Nice to read something short and funny!
hah! wonderful twist! I love the spare language and rhythm - good example of less is more!
Thanks Zanna. It's really an experiment in form. I had an earlier version with even more repetition, but that seemed just a little too much.
I like this; nice, simple, but structured with vivid imagery.
Nice to read something short and funny!