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Vincent's avatar

Glad to be of help - simplicity is a double-edged sword. Too little of it and obscurity tumbles in, too much and the energy of poetry drains away to greetings card nothing.

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Isabel Footring's avatar

Bravo!

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vincent de souza's avatar

10 lines begin with the word “the” which is over plain and impoverished in terms of selection. Enriched or layered this is not.

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Ian Gouge's avatar

It is simple, yes. Thanks for the comment.

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zanna beswick's avatar

Lovely. Simple and effective.

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David W. Berner's avatar

Beautiful

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