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Interesting how Paul feels challenged by his new studio and how a sense of Madame's expectation (as he imagines it) is felt as diminishing to him. The reader is beginning to see Paul's need to 'prove' himself (as much to himself, perhaps, as to Madame?), as well as some self-doubt.

Three things I noticed 1) 'that I'd subconsciously wanted to delineate' is a real mouthful. 'I hadn't realised I wanted to...' instead? 2). you have 'not longer blame' when it should be 'no longer'. 3) 'happened the space' should be 'happened in the space'.

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