As a big believer in editing (it's what I do for a living, after all), I heartily applaud giving yourself the freedom to like or even love a line. In my last Substack post (https://the17pointscale.substack.com/p/collecting-pictures-from-a-flood?r=195lr), I even made myself cry. That felt weird to acknowledge, but I think it's also OK.
Anyway, I really like the first line that you shared and your sand-stuck neologism and the way I feel like you're moving, unexpectedly, from looking up to down at/into the earth, and the word pirouette is always fun.
Thanks Andrew. I think it's okay to make yourself cry too; the last section of my novella 'Writing to Gisella' (to be re-released this autumn after another light edit!) does it for me.
As a big believer in editing (it's what I do for a living, after all), I heartily applaud giving yourself the freedom to like or even love a line. In my last Substack post (https://the17pointscale.substack.com/p/collecting-pictures-from-a-flood?r=195lr), I even made myself cry. That felt weird to acknowledge, but I think it's also OK.
Anyway, I really like the first line that you shared and your sand-stuck neologism and the way I feel like you're moving, unexpectedly, from looking up to down at/into the earth, and the word pirouette is always fun.
Thanks Andrew. I think it's okay to make yourself cry too; the last section of my novella 'Writing to Gisella' (to be re-released this autumn after another light edit!) does it for me.
Love it! The imagery is tangible, word choice spot on.
Makes me remember Emerson’s ‘Hamatreya’.
Thanks Brenda
I don't remember serenading a worm.....but if I did, I do hope they liked it.